ideas for next multi draft

My main goal is to stop using passive voice. It's usually easier for me to write in passive than active. I have this problem in another one of my courses, but I am trying to improve. Also, for my next assignment, I'll be more descriptive. I showed some descriptions, but I know more would of made the paper better.

eating animals

I don't find it wrong to eat animals, and this book leans more to the vegetarian side. I'm for eating healthy, but meat is meat. It's still going to be there whether we eat it or not, so I'll eat it.

rebuttal

A good point to argue would be the family that they interviewed. The family has low income, therefore considering them minorities. Being in a similar position myself, I know they could have done more than eat out of the dollar menu every day. In the film, they went to a supermarket similar to the ones I go to back home, and my mother is able to purchase enough food to feed a family of four, not including our pet, with the less money than it is to go to McDonald’s every day. Let’s say they get breakfast, lunch and dinner from the dollar menu, they are using three dollars for each person giving them a total of twelve dollars a day. That’s just one day. Multiply that by the number of days in a week will give you eighty four dollars a week. My mother purchases 100 dollars worth of food for two weeks. Although prices are varied among the area you live in, taking a longer trip and spending five more dollars in gas would be better than wasting over thirty dollars more per week. Having a job does complicate things, but children I know start cooking at age twelve. It’s a matter of health and making time for helping yourself.

Pathos in film

In the film, I believe pathos was mainly expressed in the argument pertaining to the infected hamburger. The mother told her story in a dramatic way which made anyone want to try to help her in some way. Pathos was also used when they were showing how the chickens were treated. I personally love chicken and seeing that made my stomach upset. The producer knew that using pathos would appeal to a larger audience then just stating facts.

class conference

The conference didn’t go bad. I know I have to work more on my writing style to be more specific on what I am trying to tell my reader. The criticism wasn’t anything drastic; it was fair and precise, and there was nothing to be changed.